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Costumes Bring extinct Different Personalities Pulling up in the parking divvy up in that location argon smooth groups of plurality advertizeed almost getting out of their cars and preparing to enter the building, there is jest and talking throughout the parking lot leading up to the building. Every iodin is svelte in costumes for the theme of the company there are mummies, zombies, cartoon fibres, fairies, devils, medicineians, first-rate Heroes, cowboys and cowgirls, and many more. Everyone wearing a costume touchms to constitute a more outgoing and somewhat false personality relevant to the oddball or thing that their costume is portraying.As we passing play closer to the entrance from the parking lot you can hear the music, and the noise of the people inside. The music is loud and draws a crowd towards the doors. When we arrive at the entrance to the building there is a lady about five feet five inches tall with light brownish shoulder length hair wearing a cowg irl outfit, standing backside a booth, checking Identification to ensure allone who enters is at least twenty dollar bill one years of age, and also collecting the entrance fee from from individually one person. Shes talking with a fake country accent that helps add character to her costume.Her personality is bubbly and welcoming it sets the tone for what the atmosphere is inside the building. thither is a nonher person at the entrance, a man standing beside her he is tall about six foot five or so, he has short brown hair and is wearing a uniform shirt instead of a costume. His personality is more calm and natural I feel that this is because he is not in a costume so he doesnt have the same storm up as the others who are in costume have. He checks everyones bags for weapons, alcohol, and anything that would not be permitted inside the building.He then places a paper bracelet around each person wrist to identify that they have been checked through security, and are permitted to enter the building, this also helps the measuretenders identify that the person they might be lot alcohol to have been verified as over the age of twenty one. When we walk in the front door the noise of laughing, talking and the music has gotten much louder, it is now sort what the atmosphere in the building is, there are people everywhere, talking, drinking, and having a good time, it seems bid and relax, entertainment is everywhere.No topic what direction you change by reversal there are so many divers(prenominal) smells, but with the huge crowed of people the strongest of all the smells would by far be the body odor. Straight ahead as soon as you walk in the door there is a bar where a bar tendered dressed in a devil costume stands taking orders and qualification drinks, she seems busy and more mute then the rest of the employees, but every once in awhile she will scowl in a fun way at someone in character to her costume.There is a large line of people surrounding the ba r waiting for their turn they are all laughing and some are even in a playful mood using props to their costumes as weapons to participation with each other. To the left is a long table of people, a move floor, and a DJ station. Looking to the right there is more small grouped tables, restrooms, and a door to an exterior area where people are smoking and talking. There is a group of people standing external dressed as the ghost buster crew, they are all playacting out scenes from the movie, they are sure to stay in full character through the entire scene.Their enthusiasm is socialize to set up the least, and it draws a crowd of people. Others start to join their lead, there is a small group of pirates that are also sward fighting and talking in accents that suggest their characters. The outside atmosphere is more playful then inside and is also a little quieter. Overall everyone is having a good time and the theme of the party is in honor of the holiday Halloween.There is cos tume struggle that everyone was encouraged to enter, it seems to ramp up the excitement throughout the building, everyone begins to gather around the stage. They had everyone who entered the costume contest line up on stage one by one. The costumes were judged by the crowed in a scale of how loud their yelling was. As each person was presented in the line of contestants they acted in a way to present the character of their costumes. There was a woman dressed up as a lion tamer, and another woman with her dressed as a lion.They acted out a scene when it was their turn on stage. The tamer act to tame the wild lion while the lion persistently seek to attack the tamer. As the night goes on the atmosphere changes, everyone has obviously had a lot more to drink and the levels of intelligence have diminished. As I look to my left by the dance floor I see a fight between two girls, there are garb flying, and a crowd of people quickly gathering to get in on the action. This is now becomi ng an atmosphere that I may not want to be in for much longer.Although the festivities are quiet entertain and adrenaline is pumping with every move from the dance floor it is now clear that the night is almost over. As the bouncers approach the crowed they move through crisply to break up the fight, and sort out what has happened. I watch intently to see the damages that are done its almost sad how entertaining this has become. Once the fight has been broken up, those involved in the fight, and the bouncers all will out of the building, the party then goes on.The DJ makes an announcement that this will be the extend song and the party will soon end. As the last song comes to an end the crowd of people being to leave out the front door. Everyone is still playful and maintain their characters as they gather around their vehicles and begin to reverse the entire process. Overall the night was entertaining to say the least the costumes created an atmosphere that was out of the normal and would most identically not have existed if it wasnt for the costume and the theme of the party. Clear and engaging entryway that clearly states a strong thesis 14/20 composition engaging and full of detail, there is no clear thesis or map. Something like, this was a great party because of the atmosphere, the costumes, and the mood would have worked. * Clearly completed supporting details, in the form of observations, that support your thesis 15/20 There are lots of supporting details, but because the framework is missing, it is indecipherable what those details support. * Transitions and Topic Sentences 15/20Dont forget topic sentences at the start of every major point. They need to provide a transition, a connection to the thesis, and the topic/point of the paragraph/section. Therefore, when you start discussing atmosphere something like Another reason why the party was so much fun was the atmosphere would have worked. * A conclusion that reinforces the focus and dominant ideas in the text 18/20 * Engaging Tone and Style5/5 * Grammar, Punctuation, and Spelling 8/10 * MLA Header and title 5/5 GRADE 80